How do you like my story...?

Honestly, I love it. As soon as I read your first sentence, I was engrossed in the story. You are very talented and use great imagery. I could imagine the junior strutting like a gorilla. This is on the way to becoming a very incredible story. As for the believability, I can see it happening but I like having it as something more in my imagination, giving myself opportunities to create my own possibilities and assumptions of what happens next. Once again, very talented. Kudos :)